Sail: Chapter 1 (again)



  • a Cythera novel

    @breadworldmercy453_bot, on 07 December 2013 - 10:29 AM, said in Sail: Chapter 1:

    I think it is wise for you to keep plowing through the novel before worrying about revisions ^_^ You wouldn't want to spend four years revising chapter one!

    Uhh… :huh:

    Well, over a year later, here's a massive overhaul of chapter 1. You may notice a LOT of changes, including a POV shift, plot differences, and yes, even Kat's name has changed. I learned recently that The Last Airbender has a water bender named Katara, and a water mage named Katerei sounds suspiciously similar, even though mine came first. -_- But I took the opportunity to give her a name that's hopefully easier to pronounce.

    I'd like to ask one of our friendly local moderators to delete the previous versions of chapters 1 and 2, but Avatara will probably insist that it stays put so he can compare them.

    Also, does this count as my summer chron challenge entry? :D

    ~-~-~

    (scrubbed)

    This post has been edited by iKaterei : 14 December 2015 - 06:20 AM



  • Wowev! That was a lot different than how I remember the first chapter (though I don't remember it very well). I like it ^_ _^ Especially the description of the rift between worlds. How is it that you only recently learned about Katara? I've been teasing you about that for years o __O

    It's really exciting that you're working on your novel! : __D



  • @breadworldmercy453_bot, on 14 July 2014 - 09:05 PM, said in Sail: Chapter 1 (again):

    How is it that you only recently learned about Katara? I've been teasing you about that for years o_O

    Have you? I didn't notice :blink:



  • Very descriptive and well-written :) . I'm curious about the rift that Katerei perceives and how it will play into the future story.

    Also, it sounds to me like you should sue the show's creators ;) .

    Finally...we have a friendly moderator on the Cythera boards :blink: ?

    Personally, I don't really like deleting old stories or posts, and I'm inclined to suspect you are correct about Avatara's desire to leave the previous stories up for comparison. I think, therefore, that I'll leave the matter up to him.



  • Maybe I haven't made as many Avatar jokes as I thought : __\ I thought I had a waterbender joke in one of my GM stories (the one with the Avatar opening), but it looks like I edited it out. Or maybe it was a different story. & I'm too lazy to check my IRC logs to see if I've compared Katerei to Katara on there, at least when you were around. You know my logs don't even tell me who was in the channel at the time? It's only obvious if they said something : __(

    I vote for keeping the original first chapter drafts; but if Tyry opts to delete them, at least I have copies in my story archive : __D



  • @selax_bot, on 17 July 2014 - 09:28 PM, said in Sail: Chapter 1 (again):

    Finally...we have a friendly moderator on the Cythera boards :blink:?

    You don't think gandreas is friendly?

    @breadworldmercy453_bot, on 18 July 2014 - 09:01 AM, said in Sail: Chapter 1 (again):

    I vote for keeping the original first chapter drafts; but if Tyry opts to delete them, at least I have copies in my story archive :D

    Curses, foiled again!



  • @ikaterei_bot, on 18 July 2014 - 01:06 PM, said in Sail: Chapter 1 (again):

    You don't think gandreas is friendly?

    Hmm, well, I guess you could send him a PM and see whether he's willing to help you out or not...


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