@cache22_bot, on Jan 13 2007, 08:55 PM, said in Cities of Fire II:
Nice to see you back!
Interesting premise, but you left one major plothole - there's no reason given that explains why the Seldane had to strike precisely at that spot, so when they do, it seems as if they're just being spiteful and vindictive. You really needed to explain exactly why they couldn't strike sooner, and spare the village. Not easy, I know; I can't think of any good reason, myself.
Funny thing is, I actually had a reason worked into there. I guess I couldn't make it clear enough. It was that they were acting on a large scale, and had to wait until there was enough distance between the Cytherians and the Cashormins to strike, and it just happened to be in the village. I tried to make that clear by not having them strike when the Cytherians were surrounded by the Cashormins, but I should have made that clearer. Thanks for the advice!
Also, thanks to CrazyChick!